Bare branches touch
Over the lane where we walk
Fingers entwined.
~~~
Dappled sun on our faces,
We are blind to the shadows.
~~~
(c) Jackie Le Poidevin
Written for Writing201: Fingers and the latest Carpe Diem Tan Renga challenge.
The goal of the Tan Renga challenge is to write a second stanza of two lines (7-7 syllables) to complete or continue the scene in a 3-line haiku. I had the honour of one of my own haiku being chosen for the challenge this week. But since a tan renga is written by two poets, my extended version is actually a tanka, which follows the same format but is written by only one person.
There are some great tan renga based on my original haiku on the Carpe Diem website, suggesting a wide range of moods – and there are still a couple of days left to have a go at the challenge.
bare branches..fingers entwined.. oh well said!
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[…] entwined. a whimper from the graveyard making us tighten our grip *Opening gambit © by Jackie Le Poidevin Final two lines of each set © 2015 by Magical Mystical Teacher More Carpe […]
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I know that blindness very well, as the desert lends itself to dazzling the eyes!
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